28 notes - 6 years ago

Ii-amnot-oneofyourstories:

bunbundango:

Finished the tenth page!

ALRIGHT WELL i figured i should do a thing
i’m sorry if i sound too mean?? i’m not trying to be but a lot of the time i end up too blunt regardless of my intent. if you think i am-you know, let me know! that would be A Good Thing.

Keep reading

You don’t sound mean at all, Fay! This is on par with the level of critique I used to get in college, and I loved getting that much feedback on things! I promise I don’t react to constructive criticism the way Darling is here. Even if something is being perceived in a way that I had not intended, I think it is valuable enough to know how other people are taking it so I can figure out to reshape things to communicate what I was going for.

I’ve learned to not be attached to these kinds of things so as to not take criticism personally, so really I don’t think critiquing like this would even sound mean to me unless you started to critique me as a person and say something like “Bluh bluh Brooke what’s wrong with you why would you make that decision that was so moronic and so are you bluh bluh,” instead of just critiquing the work and I know you wouldn’t do that kind of thing!

I completely agree that these things are difficult to change at this stage and that this kind of feedback is much more beneficial before completion! Rick didn’t necessarily want me to post WIPs of pages online, but I think this is good reason why it would be alright. Although, if that doesn’t fly with him, I think just sending these by you would be more than satisfying! That is, if you were okay with that sort of thing. I wouldnt not mind showing you my sketches of these.

I also completely agree with the positioning commentary you had as far as the speech bubbles and figure placement goes. The panel sizes, however, are being constricted strictly to a grid that keeps them roughly thirds of the page. I’ve asked Rick about it but he’s pretty insistent that they remain unchanged (at least until Chapter 2, where we’re gonna play with a lot of a things when Darling gets to Synafta).

I think overall I need to be more considerate of the compositions in the individual panels, which I feel I’ve been slacking on lately. Another thing is the figures in general. Nearly the whole time when I was drawing the figures in the page I couldn’t help but feel I was really rusty at people and all that encompass them- proportions, stiffness (which is something I’ve struggled with a lot), poses, and general anatomy as a whole. Taking the time to practice up on figure drawing would be really beneficial and I am probably going to do that.

The background figures were intended to look like they were having a conversation, so the left one’s gaze was intended to be looking towards the other background character. I can understand if this doesn’t come across if the person they’re talking to doesn’t seem to be interacting with them at all though.

The notebook was actually something Rick brought up too, concerning the holes. I had depicted it that way in a previous page so I kept it up for consistency’s sake. Though I could have sworn notebooks with holes like that are in existence? But after being questioned a couple times on this now I’m starting to wonder about that. The binding I had only been outlining instead of coloring if I deemed it not close enough to show detail, but if it’s seeming like a mistake then perhaps I should go about it a different way.

(Source: darlingcomic, via i-amnot-oneofyourstories-deacti)

#Very Good Stuff #Thank you as always Fay #Let me know if it would be okay to just #send you cleaned up sketches via Skype or wherever #If you're down with that #Also maybe I should start to tag this with #Long post